2011广州市一模英语深度点评

基础写作思路：

【1】     构思5句

结合本次一模：

第一句：存在的问题

第二、三、四句：建议

第五句：好处

【2】      关键词翻译

交通拥堵：traffic jams/traffic congestion

少开：（对于不可以直译的可以解构字面意思）reduce the use of

完善：improve

鼓励：encourage

节能：save energy 或 energy conservation(这是一个社会热点词汇，同学们一定要背熟)

【3】        添加连词

结合本次一模，建议有三条，可以用first, second, third来连接，彰显文章的清晰度。

其次，in light of this fact用来作为原因和结果的连接。 

个人版本：

The problem of traffic jams and air pollution has caused growing public attention. In light of this fact, some suggested that first, the car owners should limit the use of private cars by sharing the same car with others. Secondly, the government should make it a great convenience for people to use public transport by improving the public transportation system. Third, it should be encouraged to build green lanes and ride bikes. In this way, we can benefit from money-saving, time saving, energy conservation as well as environmental protection.