“互换身份”—2015广州一模英语读写任务之我见

下面是笔者指导高二（20）班胡静云同学所写出的英语文章，欢迎大家一起学习交流！先点个赞~

A TV show called A walk in Your Shoes provides people who want to experience a different way of life with a chance to switch places with others, from which participants can benefit a lot.

If I have the chance, I really want to become Helen Keller, a famous writer, who had never gave up hope in spite of great difficulties. I want to experience how tough a life would be without sight and sound. And I want to learn from her outstanding example in order to strengthen my mental power and to overcome all the obstacles on the road to success.

 During the week, I would learn to acquire the knowledge in the special way created by her tutor Anne Sullivan. With an object into one of my hands and with some letters spelling on my other hand, I would have to learn the word and understand its meaning. It would be devastatingly hard, but I believed I would eventually succeed in feeling the pressure and pride that she must have felt after she conquered. And I would also learn to comprehend life by feeling the warmth of sun shining on my face and smelling the fragrance of the honeysuckle with which the path was covered.

 From the experience, I could fully understand what huge challenges to live as disabled people, thus we should show sympathy especially enough respect to them. Moreover, I would learn to hold an appreciative and optimistic attitude towards my life and value what I already have.

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笔者点评：笔者的这位徒弟一向十分敬佩海伦凯勒，并视之为自己的偶像和学习榜样。她在受到笔者的启发后有感而发，写下了这篇作文。无疑，这篇文章是成功的！它真实自然地表达出了作者内心的想法。作者将她了解到的海伦凯勒的人生经历巧妙地置换到自己身上，并赋予其细节的想象，使得文章极其富有表现力！从中我们可以看出作者强大的语言功力和深厚的阅读积累！尽管其中会不可避免地有一些小错误，但瑕不掩瑜，此篇文章勘称佳作！好！

综上所述，写好一篇英语作文其实并没有那么难，只是同学们的思路没有打开，很多同学抱怨说一见到那恼人的英文字母就头脑发晕，思路全断。事实上也是这样，笔者相信如果这是一道语文作文题目，同学们一定能够在考场上写出精彩的文章。为什么英语作文做不到呢？归根到底，就是因为同学们始终把英语看作是一门“外语”，始终认为英语是别人的语言而不是自己的语言，正是这种错误的观念影响了大家，从根本上导致了学不好英语的情况。同理，我们也应该把英语作文当作语文作文一样去认真对待！所谓“英语写作”，“写作”是主是本，“英语”是次是末，“英语”作为工具应当为“写作”而服务。一般评价一篇英语作文的水平，无非是从四个主要的方面入手：语言、结构、内容、思想。其中“英语”层面下的是“语言”，“写作”层面下的是“结构”、“内容”和“思想”。“英语”比“写作”应当是是一比三的关系。虽然在目前的英语高考中，作文题目主要考察的还是学生对语言的驾驭能力，但这并不代表评卷老师不看重文章本身。笔者建议同学们在平时学习的过程中，不妨让英语回归工具的本质，把学到的知识都要用起来！只有先在观念上发生转变，才有可能产生事半功倍的效果！

（特别鸣谢：广东北江中学高二年级英语科备课组 梁冠华教师工作室 新东方在线）
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